Sunday, June 2, 2013

The Mystery of the Broken Heart

Here is my attempt at a story based on Nancy Drew: Ghost of Thornton Hall.  This is Chapter One.

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Nancy Drew yawned, as she walked out of the cemetery. Glancing at her watch, she saw that it was 12:05 AM.

I should get to bed, she thought, feeling a little disappointed that she still hadn't solved the mystery that night. As she headed toward the main building, Nancy pulled out her cell phone and called her friend Bess.

Bess picked up the phone on the fourth ring. "Hello?"

"Hey, Bess," Nancy said. "I thought I'd give you a progress report, before I went to sleep."

"Great, I've been waiting for you to call," Bess said. "I've been waiting on pins and needles for you to solve this mystery."

"Have you figured out who killed Charlotte yet?" a male voice asked.

Nancy stopped dead in her tracks. "Ned?"

"Yeah, it's me."

Nancy was very careful with her next question. "Bess, why is Ned at your house, after eleven o'clock?"

There was a slight pause. "Nance, Ned is hanging out with me, while everyone else is out of town. I told you that."

"He was there last night, too. And the night before." Nancy clenched her fists. "How much time have you two been spending together?"

"It's not what it seems like," Ned said quickly.

"Really? Because it seems like my boyfriend and my best friend are dating behind my back!" Nancy said.

"What? No!" Bess said. "We're just having a movie marathon together, that's all! Friends do that all the time!"

"Yeah, I was going to go home, as soon as we're done with Eclipse," Ned said. "There's only about fifteen minutes left."

"You're watching Twilight together?" Nancy asked. "How many other romance movies have you two watched?"

"Well, I don't like those action films that Ned owns, so I usually force him to watch romcoms," Bess said. "I think we've seen about five of them-"

"I hate you," Nancy said. She hung up her phone, then threw it against the nearest tree.

8 comments:

Anonymous said...

Ooohhhh I knew it was only a matter of time!!!!
I did think that was a bit suspicious too lol

Anonymous said...

Shocking! Can't wait for more!!!!

Anonymous said...

Lol this story almost made me fall out of my chair. "And Nancy threw her phone at a tree." haha that was the best part.

William D said...


Woah, Nancy, temper tantrum!!! Also if it was really late, wouldn't it be A.M? Because otherwise if P.M it would be noon.... *sigh* the stress made Nancy go CRAZY :O

Suzanne Klare said...

If anybody doesn't know what's going on with Bess and Ned, check Arglefumph's Mustery of the broken heart on fanfiction. His username is "Professor snaglefoompus"

L said...

HA! Yeah, when my husband and I were playing, we both thought it was weird that Ned and Bess were always together, going to movies, etc. I wouldn't be extremely happy if my husband went to a movie with just my best friend.

Breanna(; said...

Funny, Michael I cant wait to see what happens next(:

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